VN Ren'Py Broken Horizons [Demo] [Epsi]

[A Common Crab]

Played it. It features, in no particular order of relevance: Honey Select's default poses. Extensive, irrelevant, and generic dialogue. Basic UI that does nothing more than count as a bare minimum, a complete absence of actual progression on any direction, an abrupt end, mood-breaking pop-culture references, and more!

In short: I won't be touching this again unless something major changes about it.

 

[Deleted member 7705548]

Played it. It features, in no particular order of relevance: Honey Select's default poses. Extensive, irrelevant, and generic dialogue. Basic UI that does nothing more than count as a bare minimum, a complete absence of actual progression on any direction, an abrupt end, mood-breaking pop-culture references, and more!

In short: I won't be touching this again unless something major changes about it.

Couldn't agree more, today is weekend and I played lots of games, but this one ugh! Just the waste of internet.

I won't touch either unless just like you said.

 

[Deleted member 7705548]

I agree with your comments, guys. If I had to write a review the commentary of A Common Crab would be more than enough. It's a demo anyway. When the developer has released 1-2 updates I will write a review.

Game might have potential, we will see how's other characters, we don't even know anything about MC personality and nothing about his love interest.

We just have to wait........

 

[Ashira13]

wasn't this on here before, with more content?

 

[Jnx]

I like the random non-english character thrown into random words.
Instills confidence

Also, what's with everyone releasing a "Demo" lately? Games lately release these tiny micro-updates AS IS, a demo with nothing to do won't attract me to your project.
"Here's a demo of our VISUAL NOVEL. You click to advance text and sometimes, there's a CHOICE. Very technical, I know"

 

[Cajun Fox]

This has potential

Will keep an eye on this.

 

[kcoope89]

Looks promising, hope dev sticks with this

 

[Ingfire]

I like the random non-english character thrown into random words.
Instills confidence

Also, what's with everyone releasing a "Demo" lately? Games lately release these tiny micro-updates AS IS, a demo with nothing to do won't attract me to your project.
"Here's a demo of our VISUAL NOVEL. You click to advance text and sometimes, there's a CHOICE. Very technical, I know"

I mean, the Dev didnt post this himself on here. Which explains the odd character in the Description, which was badly copy-pasted by the F95 Uploader. He posted it on his Itch, and seems to just be doing this just to do it. Everyone in this thread being negative is acting like this is supposed to be a full chapter release, but as he said in his Chapter 1 progress post, its a "proof of concept", and not the actual "First chapter". The Dev seems to want to tell a story, and as long as its decently written, I'll give it a shot. The dev is teaching himself HS2 and Ren'py as he goes with this, so why anyone is expecting more than what is clearly and blatantly stated as a first attempt is beyond me.

 

[Ashira13]

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[Jnx]

I mean, the Dev didnt post this himself on here. Which explains the odd character in the Description, which was badly copy-pasted by the F95 Uploader. He posted it on his Itch, and seems to just be doing this just to do it. Everyone in this thread being negative is acting like this is supposed to be a full chapter release, but as he said in his Chapter 1 progress post, its a "proof of concept", and not the actual "First chapter". The Dev seems to want to tell a story, and as long as its decently written, I'll give it a shot. The dev is teaching himself HS2 and Ren'py as he goes with this, so why anyone is expecting more than what is clearly and blatantly stated as a first attempt is beyond me.

Tag them then.
White knight somewhere else.
Better yet, just tell the dev "The Dev seems to want to tell a story, and as long as its decently written, I'll give it a shot"
I made a generalized question about how a lot of devs are releasing demos of linear stories, it makes no sense.

 

[Epsillyon]

So this is where the party is then.

Sup, dev here.

The first version I uploaded wasn't even like really, a real thing. I just wanted to show my co-writer what the general outline of the game would look like. I'm aware it's very shit lol. This will not be the standard going forward.

And yeah, I don't really know what I'm doing, but I do have a plan for the story. Pretty odd to draw conclusions about me as a person and the game as a whole from 3 minutes of "content." That being said there is improvisation everywhere, and I don't really see how that's a problem. Every creative writer does it.

I probably overestimated how easy my ideas would be to convey in honey select 2... Lots of post processing and shit to do eventually.

And yes, I'm learning. All of my time in ren'py and hs2 has been been devoted to this, and I haven't touched them prior to starting this. This is a huge undertaking in every sense of the word.

I would upload it myself here but I have no fucking clue how to use this website.

 

[Epsillyon]

I mean, the Dev didnt post this himself on here. Which explains the odd character in the Description, which was badly copy-pasted by the F95 Uploader. He posted it on his Itch, and seems to just be doing this just to do it. Everyone in this thread being negative is acting like this is supposed to be a full chapter release, but as he said in his Chapter 1 progress post, its a "proof of concept", and not the actual "First chapter". The Dev seems to want to tell a story, and as long as its decently written, I'll give it a shot. The dev is teaching himself HS2 and Ren'py as he goes with this, so why anyone is expecting more than what is clearly and blatantly stated as a first attempt is beyond me.

Pretty much this.

I could've done a better job of conveying this and do it a bit differently to improve first impressions so that's on me. It's all understandable really, I see where they're all coming from since I'd be pretty annoyed too tbf.